Vamppyyri tarina (englanniksi)

[Nysse]

Tämä on nyt aika nopeasti kirjoitettu joten virheitä löytyy luultavasti todella monta.

Abhash looked at the force that was gathering in the valley below him. He saw tiny figures running around trying to get to their positions in front of the Undead army. Abhash gave a silent laugh at the thought of fighting the people he had once belonged to. He had once been a mortal, a great hero of the Empire. When he had once been visiting his father’s grave he had been surprised by a vampire who had bit him, giving him the curse of vampirism.

Looking around Abhash could see his force were in place. Rank after rank of elite black knights and grave guards were standing still like a statue waiting for his order of advance. Turning back to see the Empire army starting to advance towards his forces, he gave a silent order to move. As one the Undead started towards the living in a perfect battle line. Glancing to his left Abhash could see a pair of Banshees moving through the rocky ground to get to the rear of the Empirean forces.

He could now clearly hear the human officer’s voices shouting orders to their men to continue the advance and not flee. As the two armies closed on each other Abhash gave the order to charge. The Black Knights charged with rock shattering force into the huge blocks of Empirean troopers cutting them with ease. In the head of his own regiment Abhash charged the Reiksguard knights, skewering two of them with his lance and cutting the head of another one. His knights did no worse and killed over a dozen of the knights. The air was now filled with the sounds of battle as the two armies clashed.

After the initial assault the Empire force started to fight back, desperate not to loose their lives. The Reiksguard opposing Abhash and his bodyguard fought bravely killing ten of his knights. They didn’t have a chance though, for the Vampire Lord was far too powerful for them to kill. Blocking a blow with his shield Abhash thrust his blade through the brave knight who had been fighting him. Abhash looked around at the battlefield, spotting the Empire Commander, sitting atop a huge warhorse observing the battle, Abhash started cutting his way through the humans to their commander he bellowed his challenge. He could see the human was hesitating, but accepted the challenge rather than hiding behind his soldiers.

With a horrendous shout Abhash charged swinging his sword at the human commander. It looked like he would be ending the fight before it even started, but at the very last moment the human put his shield up blocking the attack. Abhash smiled; maybe this human could offer some resistance. Abhash started swinging at the human testing his defences. He could see that this was no young hothead, but a skilled veteran. Suddenly changing the direction of his blow he hit the human in the arm, causing a minor wound, but already his sword was starting to suck out the soul of the human commander. Shouting in agony the human tried to fight against the cruel magic’s of the sword, but in vain. Grasping his hand the human fell from his horse and hit the ground with a hard thud.

With their commander gone the Empire’s “finest” started fleeing the terrifying force that was against them. Abhash could see that his cavalry started chasing them down destroying unit after unit of the helpless humans. Glancing back at the body lying in front of him he smiled. The human’s life wouldn’t be over yet, Abhash had been careful not to kill the human, but to only get him to lose consciousness. Leaning down Abhash bit the human into the throat mixing his blood with the blood of the human…



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[High king Godric]

Hyvää tarinaa, eikä kirjoitusvirheitä ollut niin paljon, että ne olisi häirinnyt lukuelämystä Lisää vaan oli kenties hieman hack an`slashia, mutta veriseltä taistelulta ei voi muuta odottaakkaan. Jatkoa heti kun inspis antaa myöten.

[Routamieli]

Mielestäni on erittäin ironista, että tässä englanniksi kirjoitetussa stoorissa on vähemmän kirjoitusvirheitä kuin useimmissa suomenkielisissä.
Ihan luettava tarina, vaikka olikin melko ykstoikkoinen ja lyhyt. Aika hyvin muuten osaat tuota englantia.

[Nysse]

Mielestäni on erittäin ironista, että tässä englanniksi kirjoitetussa stoorissa on vähemmän kirjoitusvirheitä kuin useimmissa suomenkielisissä.

noh oon käyny 2vuotta englanniks kuolua ja nyt 4 vuotta kielikylpy luokalla niin saattaa vaikuttaa asiaan =)

Jooh jatkoa on tulossa kyllä, ton vamppyyrin alkuaikojen muodossa. Pitäis ensin vähän ideoida sitä.